Nice first submission here! I like the idea of the game and the execution, but it is just a few minutes long, if you play all endings. I don't know the reason behind that, but this way it is not a story with much meat, if you get what I mean. As a writer I can tell you, such stories can bloom very good, if you explore the internal conflicts of your characters or their conflicts with other characters. If your story has a certain direction, than you can take your player on a journey to somewhere, that's always a good thing! Keep it up!
In the Mum Section, the scoll functionality does not work properly. I cannot see the full text after: "
When I told Dad that I was bisexual and all about the situation I was having, he called her up and told her, "Hey hon, we have a situation here. Luth just came out and told me everything."
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Nice first submission here! I like the idea of the game and the execution, but it is just a few minutes long, if you play all endings. I don't know the reason behind that, but this way it is not a story with much meat, if you get what I mean. As a writer I can tell you, such stories can bloom very good, if you explore the internal conflicts of your characters or their conflicts with other characters. If your story has a certain direction, than you can take your player on a journey to somewhere, that's always a good thing! Keep it up!
Thank you so much and am sorry it took me this long to reply
Better than no reply :p
of course well thank u again
you can fix this if you right ckick you can select the the Frame in order to see the whole text.
Pretty good first submission, i like it <3
I hope to see some more improvement
Kind regards,
Kind stranger aka me
Thank you and am sorry for replying very late
Dad is also broken, pls fix, kthxbye
Ok yeah
In the Mum Section, the scoll functionality does not work properly. I cannot see the full text after: "
When I told Dad that I was bisexual and all about the situation I was having, he called her up and told her, "Hey hon, we have a situation here. Luth just came out and told me everything."
"Alright am sorry it took me so long